Critique my writing

George Orwell shows, in 1984, that a perfect conformed communistic society is impossible to reach, because of human nature. Original thought separates us from the conformed society in Orwell’s novel. 1984 is a piece of literature driven by the fears of 1949’s views of communism and a utopian society gone horribly wrong.  Read More »

This thought came to me after my last blog. My wife normally proofreads my blog so I do not sound like an idiot. I thank her for that. Well I wrote my last two blogs without her checking my work and both times she gave me that disgusted look as if my brain has leaked out of my ears. The last one I corrected with her supervision. I am almost ashamed of it.  Read More »

Traveling for days on end in the forest, hungry, dog-tired, and probably slightly mad, I parted the last branches in my way and came upon a strange sight. There before me, hidden for years in this vast jungle, was an ancient palace. It was probably of Mayan descent, but it had the qualities of Egyptian pyramids and the intricacy of Incan monuments. There was even a corporate edge to the place.  Read More »

I was born
deaf, blind, and dumb
my hands don't move
and I can't run
nobody knows my name
and I don't have a home
I have been sick six days
but I'm not scared anymore

my Heart feels good
just as it should
because if I could Feel
I would feel the sun
and if I could taste I would taste the rain
and if I could see
I would see my Father's face
shining in September  Read More »

This is my school report for plants. I was assigned to talk about the plants in the desert. Take a look and tell me how you guys think about it. This report will be broken up into a few parts so that you guys can comment on certain sections and read it easier. It will not be just one giant report.  Read More »

Answer me this do you remember the Beta format? If you do not it was a format really called the Betamax which is the 1/2 inch home videocassette tape recording format introduced on April 16, 1975. It was introduced by Sony which now has a popular new format you might know. For more info on BLU RAY format look at my previous entry.  Read More »

This is a short piece of satire I wrote for my lit class about the ridiculous relationship we have with food here in the United States. Consider it a commentary on society or just a random essay poking fun at food and dieting. Maybe it will make you think. Hopefully it will at least make you laugh. I'd love to get some feedback about my writing and how I can improve it. Enjoy!  Read More »

Imagine, if you wish, an Earth that is perfect. A pure utopia realized on our frail and troublesome planet.

There would be no more wars. Everyone can understand others and therefore there are no conflicts between peoples of different races, religions, or orientation. Children grow up peacefully in neighborhoods where their parents don't have to worry about muggers or child abductors.  Read More »